Paragraph: Distance in Global Village

A paragraph is all about passing a statement and qualifying it with evidence that can be statistical or scholarly. Only saying something, without justifying it, does not prove anything. Also, a paragraph is not a hotchpotch of random thoughts and wayward ideas. Look at the following paragraph: 

Transforming the globe into a village means that its inhabitants are well-connected, well-acquainted with one another. This global community has surpassed many challenges, particularly that of distance. Now, people from the under-developed world, even if only twenty-two percent from Africa, can connect with their counterparts residing in the developed world. There has been a time when people living in one part of the world had no clue of the people living in another part. Since the earliest civilizations of Ggantija, 8000 BC, to the more recent civilizations of Mesopotamia and Egypt, 3100 BC, humanity has trod a long path that includes marvelous inventions, like rafts and ideograms, and splendid discoveries, like fire and geomagnetism. The early civilizations had no clue of one another’s existence; travelling for discovering the land was followed by trading for better prospects of living. Those who had an interaction with foreigner were few; fewer ever stepped on a foreign land. One of the earliest pursuits of humans, after forming into cities, has been the discovery of other human colonies. Thus, connecting the dots of human presence to the point where they were joined to form the all-encompassing map of the world, thus taking the load off Atlas’ bare shoulders. Today’s world is encompassed by a cyber-space, an omnipresent phenomenon, which brings to the table even the remotest, the farthest, the strangest of the lands and their inhabitants. Information is abundant; communication easy and socialization handy. Today one’s friends are not the ones s/he knows personally but everyone/anyone who shares a common interest.

Here is how the idea/thought has developed within the paragraph: 

Transforming the globe into a village means that its inhabitants are well-connected, well-acquainted with one another. This global community has surpassed many challenges, particularly that of distance. (TOPIC SENTENCE) Now, people from the under-developed world, even if only twenty-two percent from Africa, can connect with their counterparts residing in the developed world. There has been a time when people living in one part of the world had no clue of the people living in another part. (ELABORATED IDEA) Since the earliest civilizations of Ggantija, 8000 BC, to the more recent civilizations of Mesopotamia and Egypt, 3100 BC, humanity has trod a long path that includes marvelous inventions, like rafts and ideograms, and splendid discoveries, like fire and geomagnetism. The early civilizations had no clue of one another’s existence; travelling for discovering the land was followed by trading for better prospects of living. (SUPPORTING DETAIL I) Those who had an interaction with foreigner were few; fewer ever stepped on a foreign land. One of the earliest pursuits of humans, after forming into cities, has been the discovery of other human colonies. Thus, connecting the dots of human presence to the point where they were joined to form the all-encompassing map of the world, thus taking the load off Atlas’ bare shoulders.  (SUPPORTING DETAIL II) Today’s world is encompassed by a cyber-space, an omnipresent phenomenon, which brings to the table even the remotest, the farthest, the strangest of the lands and their inhabitants.(CONCLUDING THOUGHT) Information is abundant; communication easy and socialization handy. Today one’s friends are not the ones s/he knows personally but everyone/anyone who shares a common interest.